SELF-EDITING FOR FICTION WRITERS has been a good editing resource for me.
I also recommend critiquing for several other writers in your genre so that you get a sense of how *you* would fix and change someone else's story without having the baggage of your own work/emotional investment. I find that the more I help other people wade through revisions, the better I get at revising my own.
When I'm revising for information and find that I have one scene for this bit and one scene for that bit, and another scene for yet another piece, I start trying to consolidate. I now try to have my scenes do 2-3 things each. Try to find the most interesting way to reveal the important information while also revealing character and creating tension.
And one caveat: Just because someone is published doesn't mean that their preferences in storytelling are ones that fit your style. Have you read this author's work? Do you feel that her style matches the style you want to emulate? Or does she tell stories too quickly for you? There have been plenty of times when I've exchanged critiques with writers who find my world-building to slow, but I find theirs far too fast. (And my agent doesn't think I'm slow at all--she's asking me to frontload a bit more on my current WIP.) I would want to have consistent feedback that indicated I truly had a problem--unless I feel in my gut that the person is absolutely right.