SCBWI's Blueboard - A Message & Chat Board

Writer's Room => Picture Books (PB) => Topic started by: Denise M. Cassano on November 07, 2016, 09:45 AM

Title: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: Denise M. Cassano on November 07, 2016, 09:45 AM
What do you think of using the word 'mustn't in a PB? Sounds like a silly question, but it's one of those words that looks weird on the page.

For example:

They’ll tell you to give up.  But you mustn’t!

Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: lisa-katzenberger on November 07, 2016, 09:46 AM
I agree it does look a little funny. What about "But don't!"
Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: Denise M. Cassano on November 07, 2016, 10:06 AM
yes- I have 'don't' a few lines later and I can't really change that one. I don't want repetitive words.  That's why I chose mustn't.

It's still weird.
Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: onestepp on November 07, 2016, 11:19 AM
Actually repeating or using the same word in a PB is a good thing instead of something to look down upon. 
Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: Schriscoe on November 07, 2016, 11:39 AM
Why not just go with 'must not'?  Or even "They'll tell you to give up. But don't do it!" or even "you can't!"

I agree, mustn't looks weird and wouldn't be my word of choice either.
Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: Anne Marie on November 07, 2016, 11:44 AM
Mustn't works for me if it's in the right context.
Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: DianaM on November 07, 2016, 12:58 PM
I think "mustn't" is fine if it fits the voice you're going for.
Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: Vijaya on November 07, 2016, 07:03 PM
Looks fine to me.

Okay, here's a weird thing. I was writing a book about construction and after a while the word "building" started to look strange to me. I kept pronouncing it boo-ilding. What a weird word. So the fact that something looks weird might be a completely normal phenomenon :grin3
Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: Schriscoe on November 07, 2016, 07:19 PM
Interesting V. I'll have to remember that.

Still isn't a favorite word choice of mine, but you guys make a good point on it relying voice and context.

And Diana! Is that a new Grimelda cover as your avatar? YAY!!
Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: DianaM on November 07, 2016, 07:49 PM
It is, Sharon! Hee hee. :D Coming out next July!  :sweeping
Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: DianaM on November 07, 2016, 07:51 PM
Vijaya, that's so true! Sometimes it looks weird when you look at it too long.
Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: Schriscoe on November 07, 2016, 07:53 PM
It is, Sharon! Hee hee. :D Coming out next July!  :sweeping

 :yay Can't wait to add that one to my collection! It looks fantastic!  :like
Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: DianaM on November 08, 2016, 09:41 AM
Thanks, Sharon!  :thanx
Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: Vonna on November 08, 2016, 05:33 PM
Mustn't works for me if it's in the right context.

 :like I happen to love mustn't.
Title: Re: Using "mustn't" in a PB
Post by: Debbie Vilardi on November 13, 2016, 09:04 PM
I think mustn't has great voice, but I can't say if it's the right voice for your character/narrator. All words are good words; it's in how we use them.