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Title: Inner Dialogue/Thoughts?
Post by: mara-katcher on November 15, 2021, 07:49 PM
My PB has the thoughts of the main character, which are written in italics,  but is this the right way to go? Is inner dialogue too confusing for a PB? Should I change it to spoken dialogue or portray it differently?
Title: Re: Inner Dialogue/Thoughts?
Post by: dkshumaker on November 16, 2021, 07:18 AM
When I do inner dialogue in PS, I also italicize. Just be consistent in how you treat it. When the book is acquired, the editor and art director will decide exactly how they want inner dialogue to show up in the PB.

One thing to keep in mind, since it's inner dialogue, make sure it sounds true to the character and like it's a kid, not long, flowing sentences, etc. :-)
Title: Re: Inner Dialogue/Thoughts?
Post by: Vijaya on November 16, 2021, 11:44 AM
If the text is first person narration, ALL that's written are his or her thoughts so you probably don't need to italicize. Even in a close 3rd person, thoughts and feelings belong to the narrator, so you don't have to emphasize it by italicizing blah, blah, blah, he thought. Ex. Narrator spies a jar. Cookies! It's clear that's his POV and he's thinking it. But as Deb says, above all, be consistent in your usage and the publisher will use their house style.
Title: Re: Inner Dialogue/Thoughts?
Post by: HaroldU on November 16, 2021, 03:08 PM
As an editor I am wary of inner dialogue or thoughts in a picture book text. Is there an alternative? I'm not saying don't do it, but I am saying do it only if absolutely necessary.