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Title: Showing actions like gulping or slurping
Post by: Nidhi on September 20, 2013, 08:06 PM
If a kid gulps something down, or slurps spaghetti, is it incorrect to put the words in quotes...e.g.

"Gulp!"
or "Slurp!"

Should they be without quotes?
Gulp!

Title: Re: Showing actions like gulping or slurping
Post by: olmue on September 21, 2013, 06:58 AM
Without quotes. The quotes make it look like he's literally saying the word "gulp."
Title: Re: Showing actions like gulping or slurping
Post by: DianaM on September 21, 2013, 07:46 AM
No quotes, and I think you're supposed to italicize sound words. At least, that's how I do it.
Title: Re: Showing actions like gulping or slurping
Post by: Whizbee on September 21, 2013, 09:07 AM
I also vote for italicizing. Unless the character is making some sort of commentary on his bad manners. :)
Title: Re: Showing actions like gulping or slurping
Post by: Nidhi on September 21, 2013, 10:17 AM
I thought italicizing was a big no-no. But if that's convention, I will use italics. I've had a manuscript for six years, and revised it over a hundred times, yet, last night was the first time I noticed I used "Gulp!" (in quotes). I'm horrified...missed it over re-reads and revisions over six years! I better fix that before I send the manuscript out again.  :shame
Title: Re: Showing actions like gulping or slurping
Post by: Whizbee on September 21, 2013, 10:38 AM
I thought italicizing was a big no-no.

Why is that? I've never heard that.
Title: Re: Showing actions like gulping or slurping
Post by: Christy on September 21, 2013, 10:42 AM
Yes, italicized sound words. I think overusing italics can be disruptive to the  reader so it's often recommended to use them sparingly.