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Should there be a comma after "hair?"

With a toss of her silky chestnut hair she and Todd took off down the hall.

Should there be a comma after "As soon as I sat down"?

As soon as I sat down I recognized the messy dark hair, the lopsided smile, and eyes that took in the whole room.

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#1 - June 24, 2012, 01:52 PM

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I'd say yes to both. "With a toss of her silky chestnut hair" and "As soon as I sat down" are both prepositional phrases and should be set off by commas.

When in doubt try one trick I find extremely helpful:

Take out the part of the sentence set off by commas and if you're left with a complete sentence you've comma'd correctly.

In your sentences for instance...."She and Todd took off down the hall." and "I recognized the messy dark hair, the lopsided smile and the eyes that look in the whole room." are both complete sentences.
#2 - June 24, 2012, 02:06 PM

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Dionna is correct -- both need commas.  :)
#3 - June 24, 2012, 02:18 PM
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I'd say yes to both, as well. In picture books, I increasingly see introductory prepositional phrases that aren't followed by commas, but the phrases are usually quite short.  Since yours aren't, I'd stick with the rule.
#4 - June 24, 2012, 02:20 PM

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Thanks, everyone!  :hearts :star2

Commas there shall be!
#5 - June 24, 2012, 02:38 PM

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