Pcz: I do tap out, but I'm still ear-less with meter most often. (My father was a drummer, my husband a bass player, and I've been around musicians all my life--I'm kind of hopeless. I think what I'm doing is keeping a steady beat rather than tapping out the beats, as you suggest. Well, I still invert stresses, so....)
Yes, they were the first three lines to three different stanzas. I posted the three (consecutive) stanzas in-full, and then deleted them after folks stopped commenting.
'Pathagaris' and 'gobbled' presented extra challenges for me--as did other things, such as 'Pathagaris Dorrey,' but another big one was "chewed-off" vs. "chewed off," and how I THINK it works changed the entire stanza, but it wasn't what I wanted.
There's so many reasons for rhymes to go wrong. (Oooh--when rhymes go wrong...someone could write a guide for "outlaw" rhymes.)
Thank you very much for your suggestion and comments.