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Hi,
I’m writing a picture book and the child is playing basketball but misses the basket so the ball bounces down. But I wanted to use a Onomatopoeia word. What would you suggest instead of “bounce?”

I appreciate any advice. Thanks!
#1 - July 02, 2014, 04:25 PM

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boing, thwack (to start off with)
#2 - July 02, 2014, 04:52 PM
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There are some great words like that here: http://www.writtensound.com/index.php?term=hard+hit
#3 - July 02, 2014, 05:14 PM

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Thank you for your replies. I have another question. So when you use the word such as Boing. Do you put it in all caps or not? For example: BOING. The ball bounced down to the ground.
#4 - July 03, 2014, 03:20 PM

You can write a word that denotes sound many ways, and you should choose the best way for your manuscript -  BOING, Boing,  -   Boing!        BBbooinnggg!    -  Be creative.   ::-)
#5 - July 03, 2014, 06:34 PM

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I'd avoid being too creative with the sound... you want people who read it to immediately be able to read the word out loud without stumbling, you know? You can make up a word, of course, as onestepp says, but make sure it's crystal clear and easy to read out loud because that's what tired parents will be doing with your story every night!


It's up to the editor/designer whether they put the word in upper or lower case in the book. If you want it to have emphasis you could cap it up but you don't have to.
#6 - July 03, 2014, 06:56 PM

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Thank you! All of you were very helpful.
#7 - July 05, 2014, 12:44 PM

I also use this resource.

http://www.onomatopoeialist.com/


#8 - August 31, 2014, 01:01 PM

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Sound words are often placed in italics to indicate it is a sound not spoken by anyone and not part of the general narration. This is important if the book is in first person and the main character is merely hearing it. It may not matter in a third person narration as much.
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