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Hello,

I'm writing a PB text in rhyme -which is turning out to be in the same rhythm and therefore similar style as another well- known PB.
Is this a bad way to go?

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Liz
#1 - October 16, 2015, 09:30 AM

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There isn't a copyright on rhyme patterns as far as I know. What should matter is the STORY. If the rhyming pattern is the main focus, then people will look at the story and say, "Oh. This is a copy of X book." But if the STORY is what carries the reader along, then people most likely won't notice the rhyming pattern at first. That is what you want to strive for in all rhyming stories. The rhythm and rhyme should be almost invisible to the story.
#2 - October 16, 2015, 10:29 AM
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Agree with Verla. But, I have a ms that's been rejected because the rhyming pattern is too similar to a very popular children's book :(   I tried changing it but it just does not have the same ring as my original. This is a story that's come close to acquisitions twice and I shouldn't give up on it ... but it's been a while since I've worked on it again. Busy with other stories ;)

All the best with your story,
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#3 - October 16, 2015, 12:42 PM
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I don't think it matters much. I think the similarity would have to come from something more than just the rhythm alone. I mean, there are zillions of stories published in iambic tetrameter, or what have you. Sometimes you'll see something with a less common form/pattern (such as some of Corey Rosen Schwartz's books written in limerick form, or the somewhat unique rhyme scheme of JAMBERRY), but even with those, it's not impossible to use the same pattern. HOWEVER, if you have a similar topic AND the meter and rhyme scheme are the same, then that can be a problem.
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V, wait a bit and send it out again. That other picture book will fade until yours brings out the nostalgia effect in grown ups who loved the first one.

Really, if the story is super great, the rhyme scheme shouldn't matter. It's like only allowing Shakespeare to write sonnets.
#5 - October 19, 2015, 12:07 PM
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Debbie, you are right. And thank you for the encouragement.
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#6 - October 19, 2015, 12:26 PM
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I agree with Verla, but would add that there are plenty of successful books that deliberately use the rhyme scheme of well-known stories (think: Over In The Meadow or The House That Jack Built).  I did that with A COOKIE FOR SANTA which starts with:

'Twas the night before Christmas,//And there on a plate,//Was a Gingerbread boy//Awaiting his fate.

I wanted to pull families into a cozy and familiar place. 
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