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My ms is in past tense with the line "it's never been sheared."
Someone pointed out "it's" is present tense. Can I say "it'd" instead?
I've come up with another way to write the sentence, but keeping the current form allows the preceding line to be more expressive. : So bushy! So bold! And it's never been sheared! Vs It was bushy and bold and had never been sheared.
It works, just seems less interesting? Or am I attached to my lines?
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- November 15, 2015, 11:24 AM
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Lol, Marla!
I think it'd works fine. I like the version with the exclamation points!!!!
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"It's" can also be a shortened version of "it has", which is past tense, so I think "it's" works fine too.
I was wondering, though, whether it should be "shorn" instead of "sheared". Apparently it may depend what you are referring to - ie what has been sheared/shorn. Sheared is for sheep, shorn is for other? I only had a quick peek, but I was looking at this web site:
http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/sheared?s=t
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Yes, your sentence is fine as it stands. As poster #2 said, in this case "it's" stands for" it has." "It has never been sheared" is one of the perfect tenses, which means the action happened in the past.
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What about....
So bushy! So bold! And never been sheared!
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I'd add a had. "And had never been sheared."
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