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Hi All;

I hope this is an ok query. In my synopsis for my novel, I want to mention the fact that the MC has sex for the first time at a certain juncture in the story. Now, do I say it as: "they make love" or "they have sex". Does it matter?

Oh dear, sigh.  :blushgirl
#1 - August 30, 2017, 01:17 PM
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How about using the word in the topic: they are intimate?
#2 - August 30, 2017, 02:10 PM
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I think love or sex would be appropriate,  depending on the setting and the relationship between the characters. I would be careful with the use of euphemisms, except in dialogue. As V said, became intimate, could also be the best choice of expression.
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This is a voice question. How does your character think of it? What would it say? What is the POV here? In my day it might have been "They got it on."
#4 - August 30, 2017, 09:28 PM

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How about addressing the characters feelings towards it? How were they "introduced" to sex? Like "I'd heard all of the cliched phrases:making love, sexual intercourse, just plain 'sex' & 'doing it'. I mean everyone says it differently.

I don't write that genre. Just a n opinion on phrasing.
#5 - August 30, 2017, 09:53 PM

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Around here, kids just say, 'hooked up.' But if it's a relationship where the MC cares about the partner, then you might have to consider more the voice of the character.
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